As social practice is becoming an important part of teenagers, while some argue that it should be a must for high school students to attend community activities without pay, i tend to hold a different opinion.
It is commonly acknowledged that everyone is responsible for the development of their community, therefore high school programmes should also take this as compulsory. Some claim that this arrangement could be a good chance for them to attend social practice and to build connections with community members. Furthermore, it is a practical supplement to their in-school events.
However, in my opinion, the first and foremost duty of high school students is to exert efforts on school subjects in order to prepare for the university study and for their future development. The precious time should be spent on learning knowledge and developing interest in various fields.
In addition, none of them should be forced to do any unsalaried work in their early stage, because this might convey a misunderstanding that they do not have to work for money. Take my nephew for example, he was used to offering help to neighbors for free and asked for money for school fees from his parents. And it really shocked me when he said to me that salary is not important at all as he was looking for a temporary job for summer vocation.
To conclude, despite some positives of attending community services, i assert that it would be wrong to force high school students to participate no-pay activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ttend community activities without pay, i tend to hold a different opinion. It i...
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Line 4, column 237, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'neighbor'.
Suggestion: neighbor
...xample, he was used to offering help to neighbors for free and asked for money for school...
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Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...itives of attending community services, i assert that it would be wrong to force ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1250.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98007968127 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86226075444 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585657370518 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.553791438 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273215989933 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109852953664 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468308686546 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153221404309 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284511917064 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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