Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers, for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is well-recognized that nowadays, participating in non-paying social service has become more and more popular. Although I accept that applying it as a mandatory part of secondary schools has some negative effects, I believe that it offers a higher number of positive effects.
On the one hand, there are some who think that doing charity isn't value for time. To explain, compared to another school's students who don't need to do volunteer, doing charity takes them a much more of time. For example, when the students enroll in teaching outside activities and that will cost them all day or more. As a result, if the vast majority of secondary schools required it as a compulsory part, the students couldn't have enough time to concentrate on their main subjects.
On the other hand, I hold the opinion that joining in unpaid social assistance offers them a lucrative opportunity to improve their life experiences. To be more specific, as opposed to the students who just focus on studying, these pupils can easily react to life issues. To illustrate, When they attend the working charity, they will have a chance to learn about how to behave to people around and maybe they'll have awareness about reciprocity. Consequently, If a myriad of pupils tried to do charity, they would not only become a good citizen but also accumulate a huge amount of life experiences.
In conclusion, Although there are some who think that working charity isn't time-effective, I strongly believe that it is more beneficial due to accumulating a huge amount of life experiences. Therefore I recommended that the students should participate in non-paying social activities because it's a good way for them to enjoy the fullness of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01048951049 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89496342683 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.404106996 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.416666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182335238901 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650552348171 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288892366652 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103801169912 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302495577583 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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