Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
During the time of technology boom , the usage of television and computer games has increased and gone along with myriad of violent incidents . While some people attributes it to bring about deleterious effect on the public , the others consider it as far – reaching impact on people’s demeanour. I strongly believe that in most case,media violence do spoil our behaviour pattern .
Firstly , people , especially children, have a tendency to do an impression of motives which was displayed on TV . For instance , children will imitate the way of battling on the virtual worlds and transfer it into real life . Moreover , the more aggression and violence you are surrounded by,the more cold –blooded and restrained you will get .
Secondly , the crimes of violence are attributed to the excessive access to gadgets such as computer games or violent media . For example , the combat and shooting games make teenagers become more truculent . Surprisingly enough , they tranfer this warlike approach into the real world as the way to evince their competitive spirits and comfort themselves . As a result , the rate of juvenile delinquency has begot considerably .
Last but for most , violence has inclination to turn to social evil . It is common that addictive gamer stole their parent ‘s money or even resorted to violence to be allowed to play games . The activities of such men represent a constant threat to the welfare society, and much being done to reform them.
In the nutshell , violence in contemporary media has substancial outcome on behavioural patterns . Technological gadget plays a little role to shape personal character as well as the social order . Therefore , we had better to make use of its function and minimize its effect .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26258992806 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90508085248 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658273381295 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8048503074 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.4375 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 5.01903807615 657% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198957119246 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520700553542 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049427527119 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.096870143291 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713812371876 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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