Some people consider that school education should be concentrated on academic subjects, which would be helpful for their future careers, and subjects like music and sport are not useful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
some people believe that sports positively impact on community, while others argue that sports is the same as other activities in leisure time. Although sports can bring some positive benefits for social life, I believe that it is seen as a conventional habit as others.
On the one hand, it is beneficial for residents to take part in a sport subject for the sake of their physiology and the sense of community. Firstly, people have some positive effects when regularly taking exercises. some research find that active persons suffer less risk having heart attack, relieve symptom of anxiety and depression, and the level of diabetes. Secondly, playing sport games elevate team work and stick people together. To beat other opponents, a team needs smooth co-ordination among members. Along with that, people must have a mutual understanding so that they can support the weaknesses of others. This forms a sense of collaboration which is vital in the work environment and the daily life.
On the other hand, it seems to me that sports is overrated. Apart from being a professional athlete, we do not have any economic benefit from engaging in physical activities. when people grow up, they have to find ways to make their ends meet and playing for fun does not make any sense. Besides, there are various forms of activities we can practice in our free time. All people have to do is just following their preferences. we cannot force a nerd to play basketball or soccer if he devotes all of his time for reading books or coding.
In conclusion, while playing sports may partly contribute to social development, it seems to me that the view of sports must be aligned with other activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89895470383 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65707258497 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3323290508 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.875 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171224904606 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555346043693 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365230591501 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105166645616 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0103354152852 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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