Some people hold that we should spend money and time on the protection of wild animals while others suggest that the money should be spent on populations living in the poorest areas of the world What is your opinion

Opinions are divided on whether to spend money and time on wildlife protection or to focus on helping people who are in difficult circumstances in society.The former, although it offers some benefits, I believe its disadvantage is greater for the following reasons.

In many cases, wildlife conservation requires colossal costs and time involved.This means that protection demands a huge amount of cost for many jobs such as the cost of habitat , health care, reproduction , research and security for the animals is never a small number.To exemplify this point, according to “Natural Resources and Environment” newspaper, a reputable newspaper on natural resources and environment in Vietnam, showing that in 2018 to protect wildlife species and their habitat in Cuc Phuong National Park, the government divert more than 2 million USD.If this protection does not take place , it seems that the costs could be used to help and improve the lives of those in need in society.

Admittedly, that the protection of wild animals also has outstanding benefits.Specifically, it may help medicine in animal-based research to find vaccines to treat humans .This is explained by the fact that some animals have a genetic structure similar to humans, so it has been helpful to study quite a lot.For example, during the recent covid-19 pandemic, according to the WHO, the world health organization, announced that this vaccine against the virus has been successfully researched based on testing on the body of the White Mouse. However, the big question for this problem is that the animal's body cannot be 100% human-like , thereby sometimes there would be complications that occur when taking the drug , worse still , if not detected in time could be fatal to humans.

In conclusion, animals should be protected but humans are still above all else .Allocating too much money on animal welfare is unnecessary.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, for example, in conclusion, such as, in many cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30463576159 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05284595799 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632450331126 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 60.0 20.2975951904 296% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 211.704888937 49.4020404114 429% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 320.4 106.682146367 300% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 60.4 20.7667163134 291% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 7.06120827912 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203179968508 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120968310007 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563380367596 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137028473814 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549630508865 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.7 13.0946893788 257% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 10.58 50.2224549098 21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 11.3001002004 236% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.35 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.0 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 9.78957915832 306% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.0 10.1190380762 257% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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