Some people say modern children games do not develop a wide range of skills, while
traditional games can be much better for developing such skills. To what extent do you
agree or disagree?
Over the past decades, children development has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although online games have been becoming very popular, the issue as to whether they can improve student’s abilities better than traditional games or not remain controversial. In the following essay, justification pros and cos of online game will be discussed.
On the one hand, many may advocate that conventional games have more health benefit than online games. this argument could be true to some extent. In fact, traditional games require the combination of physical activities, thereby promoting physical growth. so that, playing traditional game also is a good way to control player’s weigh, increase their stamina. In contrast, heavy computer user who spending successive hours on computer could leading to potential danger like inactivity life style, which is the main culprit of fatigue. Therefore, conventional games can help children stay from sedentary lifestyle.
On the other hand, others who argue that online games are beneficial for children hold their view for reasons. The opponent may argue that playing computer games could distract student from their main task which is study. However, they should take into account the fact that simulation games can boost intellectual abilities, logical thinking in children. For example, in many computer games, children have to play different roles and various strategies in order to win the game, so that, they could have the room to brainstorm and develop reasoning thinking. this example indicates modern games could improve many intelligent skills of children which will be very useful for their future.
In conclusion, it is very difficult to compare the beneficial of traditional and modern games. In my opinion, conventional games could promote physical growth, while online games could develop the intelligence of children as mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
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Suggestion: This
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Suggestion: So
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56271186441 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76393650719 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596610169492 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4120857098 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5625 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237626010962 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852969354644 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418245669038 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160078260411 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243417920719 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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