Some people say that money should be the main measure of success and personal status and wealthy people should be in high demand.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people often judge if a person is succesful or not by money and asset they have. I have to admit that money is the easiest thing we can see from successful people, but I strongly disagree that it should be the principal mesure of success. In this essay, I'll point out my views.
First of all, the definition of success of each individual is different so the way they consider themselves wealthy or success is distinctive and there are more factors to measure a person's success. To some people, setting goals and achieving their dreams is a success. But to others, having a healthy and happy life is something they can't ask for more or being in high positions in society and jobs. Moreover, money is not the only that a person has. Some wealthy people don't feel enjoyable or satisfied with their life although they have a lot of money because they cannot find the happiness and the meaning in life therefore, money probably cannot cheer everyone up. I have watched some interviews of the rich, who are successful and wealthy, they said that being helpful for community or following their dreams are their success in life.
Secondly, money is just the result of one's effort and hard work, but success is the process. For example, many people look so posh and fancy, they use luxurious items, but they are spending their parent's fund, they do not earn money by themselves so in these cases, we cannot say those people are successful. Successful people always learning and trying to work, devote their time for jobs. If you work hard by our merit, your mind, then you would have a lot money so you can live your fulfilled life.
To conclude, we shouldn't judge somebody just by how much money they have, it cannot be the only measurement of someone's success and wealthy people work thwmselves to earn money.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...and there are more factors to measure a persons success. To some people, setting goals ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ealthy and happy life is something they cant ask for more or being in high positions...
^^^^
Line 5, column 474, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... that a person has. Some wealthy people dont feel enjoyable or satisfied with their ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 39, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... Secondly, money is just the result of ones effort and hard work, but success is th...
^^^^
Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... fulfilled life. To conclude, we shouldnt judge somebody just by how much money t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.715625 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35562616079 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9860325909 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.785714286 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303661850496 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109385422603 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551970943297 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204749689785 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306895039928 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...and there are more factors to measure a persons success. To some people, setting goals ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ealthy and happy life is something they cant ask for more or being in high positions...
^^^^
Line 5, column 474, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... that a person has. Some wealthy people dont feel enjoyable or satisfied with their ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 39, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... Secondly, money is just the result of ones effort and hard work, but success is th...
^^^^
Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... fulfilled life. To conclude, we shouldnt judge somebody just by how much money t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.715625 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35562616079 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9860325909 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.785714286 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303661850496 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109385422603 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551970943297 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204749689785 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306895039928 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.