Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different ages and cultures together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
For a long time, music has brought significant changes in human life. Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether music is a good of connecting people from various culutures and ages or not. while there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that music has enough power to do that. The reasons are twofold.
First of all, it is an undeniable that people who are in different ages or speak different languages are still likely to have the same favourite genre of music. Whenever they could share this taste, it seems like no boundary between them anymore, and then they are much easier to become friends. For example, recently, there is a viral video on social media about a Malaysian old man who had sung a rock song of Pink Ploy - one of famous bands in 80s- while had been playing guitar. this video has watched and shared by plenty of youngsters in Vietnam, they couldn't stand stopping expressing their admiration to him and even sending friend requests to him on facebook.
Furthur importantly, though, music could make people closer and closer maybe because of its psychological effects. music is the key of releasing stress and recharging energy, therefore, it makes people more relaxed and friendly, then they easy to open their minds and even their hearts to others.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that music is one of the best powerful thing that could bring people of different cultures and ages together because there is no boundary for specific community to fall in love with the same genre of music and also due to its psychological effects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1360.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90974729242 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52577418245 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617328519856 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.3088667363 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.636363636 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1818181818 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245179146741 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808684398731 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753071497153 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145787863341 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049842580021 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.