Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
Certain people believe that schools should entail a short period of working time to the curriculum for children, who are teenager, while they are studying at school. They remained that it would provide kids useful knowledge about the world and work, which will be essential for later life. In my opinion, I partly agree with this idea and the reasons of it will be discussed in this essay.
First and foremost, it appears that if schools applying this idea, students would have a better insight about the adult life. As they working at an office there would be certain difficulties in work, which they have to overcome by themselves. Thus, these young citizens might understand deeper about the hardship that their parents or an adult have to went through, leading to incentives in study and good behaviors. Another advantage of this notion is that it its might enhance the professionalism and a range of experiences, which are the two vital requirement of many firms. Thus, teenagers are well-prepared before the graduation.
While it is true that this application would bring about a number of benefits for adolescents, it also put a lot of strain on students. Occasionally, people noticed that students are now have to study with a rigorous daily schedule, which leave no time to rest, let alone working and studying at the same time. Recent research shows that above 67% of high school students suffered from sleep deprived and only sleep for 5-6 hours per day. In addition, this would also create distraction, which might affect student academic progress. However, if these working sessions are operated in summertime, when children tend to have free time, it might not be detrimental.
In conclusion, whilst there are certain drawbacks, the merits seemed to outweigh the disadvantages. if the suggestion is probably implemented children could have a better grasp about work life and prepared beforehand.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...y, people noticed that students are now have to study with a rigorous daily schedule...
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Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
... these working sessions are operated in summertime, when children tend to have free time, ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...s seemed to outweigh the disadvantages. if the suggestion is probably implemented ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1178343949 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72246802057 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589171974522 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4682203006 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.133333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201735041238 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671031184665 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664745908995 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125900177636 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426851104961 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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