some people think that the advantages of advertising sports products through famous sports players outweigh the disadvantages. to what e do you agree or disagree.
Advertisement suppose to be the best source of masscommunication .presently, some proportion of masses assert that advertising sports products through a prominent sportsman is fruitful. Here, I would like to discord with the given statement.
There are manifold points to support my point of view. First and foremost, adverts which is endorse by eminent sports player make people more extravagant. To illustrate, there are plethora of advertisements related to sports products which is made by sportsman and folks buy these unnecessary products without any need. Therefor,people spend a hefty amount of money on sports products. What is more, advertising through famous sports players enhance the level of pollution.To be specific, people purchase new things and through the old things into landfill sites which increase the environment problems. Thus, adverts made by sports players does not fully holds the water.
Further emphasising on my point of view.Adverising with the help of sports players increase the excessive consumerism .Moreover, the main motive of adverts organization is to get benefits, For that purpose they exaggerate the products as much as they can through sports player and allure masses towards sports products .Thus, all sports products are not fruitful for people.
To recapitulate, in this era of modernity people have materialistic attitude. Undeniably, people get information related to products with the help of advertisements.However,i still believe that they have to be aware about the real and fake products.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably you should use a past participle here: 'supposed'.
Suggestion: supposed
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Suggestion: endorsed
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 234.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63247863248 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27836554086 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.2184850253 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.818181818 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361254952388 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12332337757 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845378675226 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200100414556 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0904246456345 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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