Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
These days, traffic jams have become a big problem in many communities and transforming parks and gardens into residential areas is the best way to solve commuting problems, but some people oppose such an idea. My view leans more in the direction that land near to centres should be made available for apartments.
Green spaces occupy a large area around our busy commercial and businesses and have grown in number over a long period of time, but some believe that if we construct new apartments near the main business hubs instead of leaving them as recreational grounds. For instance, workers would use less time commuting to work from distant residential areas. In addition, it would also allow professionals to easily walk a few minutes to their workplaces. Therefore, cars would reduce in numbers and ease would congestion. Furthermore, it can be argued that city centres are not perfect locations for parks, because of the hectic activity that surrounds them and those who work in the vicinity have little or no time to benefit from them.
There are, however, other people who hold different views and are not convinced by removing leisure areas form the heart of a town, or city would not be helpful. Their main consideration is the price of the land in looking at major cities around the world. For example, London, Tokyo and even Beijing provide clear evidence that building apartments in busy centres are likely to attract very high prices which most commuters could not afford to buy. Hence, such a policy would not the change current situation.
In conclusion, relocating parks and gardens may offer a reduction in people's daily commute, despite some doubts about whether it works or not, but both sides have valid concerns about the present situation. However, on the whole I would favour building moderately priced residential apartments rather than open spaces intended for leisure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07324840764 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57784204035 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656050955414 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7324552903 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.538461538 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1538461538 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218706219128 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066006403498 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429882346097 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129256432532 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179803843033 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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