Some people think that good health is very important to every person so medical serviceshould not be run by profit making companies

Many people think that good health which very important to each person, due to medical services can not be run by profit-yielding healthcare services. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, I believe that there are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, there are a number of major drawbacks when people chose private healthcare services. The first drawback is getting a private room equipped with advanced facilities, while patients in the public hospitals often have five to ten people in their room. Living in a private room helps people feel more comfortable and relaxed, contributing to their recovery process. People who choose private healthcare have the freedom to choose their own doctor, who they feel will give them the best medical treatment. For example, being treated by their chosen doctor would give them a feeling of safety and reassurance.
On the other hand, the first drawback is that not everyone can afford private healthcare services. The costs of treatment in a private hospital are often double or triple that of a public hospital. Private healthcare contributes to widening the gap between rich and poor due to the fact that only wealthy people can cover private treatment costs. For example, low-income people could get into serious debts if choosing a private healthcare service. Some people argue that the private healthcare system focus on maximizing their profits rather than improving public health because they target wealthy people as their potential clients.
In conclusion, although some people think that medical services should not be run by profit-oriented companies, I personally believe that the advantages of private healthcare outweigh its benefits and uses.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37269372694 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73900678988 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560885608856 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2707197068 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21816424305 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862133675637 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119726569963 0.0667982634062 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197897503412 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130756324769 0.056905535591 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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