Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while other think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion
Now a days, modern lifestyle brought profound changes in physical fitness, from small children to senior citizens. In this situation some people are blaming the Government for the responsibility of increasing obesity in children, at the same time, on the other hand another part of society think, it is the fault of parents i believe that the Government and Parents has to share the key role about this condition.
Day by day, people are getting more busy and busier than before, and they didn't have time to take their food in proper time. This situation leads people to face severe health problems like Obesity, Heartbreak and B.P etc. But, now a days the situation turnsthe situation turns disaster and children are also facing health problems like obesity due to lack of exercise. Negligence of government in society and carelessness of parents in home leads to create this type of situations. Once upon a time government had given initiative to all educational institutions and schools to maintain sports activities and physical fitness programs to children compulsorily. But at present competitive scenario schools and institutions exceeded authorities rules and regulations. At the same time parents are showing interest towards to join there children in the type of schools which give importance to provide competitive exams but not in sports and physical fitness. these type of situations leads to increase obesity in children. For instance in recent news 12 years old boy put up his body weight 100 kgs due to obesity.
Parents play a key role in this problem. In this modern days taking good and nutritious food is a problematic task but consuming junk food or Street foods is a easy task. Moreover parents or care takers are allowing there and younger generations to eat junk foods like cakes and chocolates. In addition to this video games and smartphone games occupied the space of physical gaming time. One example from the recent survey s is 80% of children in india was suffering from the problem of obesity.
As per my perception, everything has its own significance . so, Government and as well ass Parents plays a equel and important damage making role in the problem.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, well, as to, for instance, in addition, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04132231405 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75710732549 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2574823556 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.666666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147311374181 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404750575182 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624069445573 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953139116276 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939896540986 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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