Recent studies have shown that childhood obesity has become a pandemic across the nations giving rise to a multitude of non-communicable diseases in adulthood such as type 2 diabetes, hypertension and cardiovascular diseases. Different scientific communities have attempted to find the root causes for the aforementioned grave problem. It is widely argued that a government is accountable for the incline of childhood obesity. I strongly agree with the above fact as the policies and regulations implemented by a government have a direct impact on children's health.
Firstly, the economical policies of a government would determine the nature of investments of the multi-national food companies in a country, which would indirectly exert a negative impact on children's health. Currently, most of the nations operate an open economy where any multi-national food company could open their franchise restaurants without major obstacles. For instance, in Sri Lanka, there are various fast food outlets such as KFC, Burger King and Mc Donalds which sell unhealthy foods containing high sugar and fat content. About a decade ago these were not popular in Sri Lanka, however, nowadays most of the major cities have their outlets. One reason for the growth of the popularity of these chains is the flexible policies of the government as there are no established governing policies regarding sales, quality control and media coverage. Thus, it has directly led to the consumption of unhealthy foods by children attributing to the dramatic rise of childhood obesity.
Secondly, the educational policies which have been implemented by a government could contribute to the above growing problem. Current school syllabuses have emphasized the importance of the subject matter and downgraded the value of physical education. As a result, school children spend only a little time engaging in physical activities. Furthermore, the afterschool time has been utilized to complete homework, leading to the unavailability of time for exercises. For example, in Sri Lanka, only two periods have been allocated for physical education in schools which is hardly adequate. Hence, the sedentary lifestyle of children is another root cause for the increment in obesity in children. This unforeseen problem has been caused by the educational policies of the government.
In conclusion, I believe that the government holds responsible for the significant growth of childhood obesity due to its economical and educational policies. It is imperative to take necessary actions to mitigate the problem as a future of a nation would be destroyed by the current policies.
- It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view 84
- The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present 78
- The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005 73
- The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries 73
- The bat chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50368550369 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12140864514 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535626535627 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 506.74238477 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1542867608 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.894736842 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15789473684 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13876313681 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458719363271 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040220471661 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893727270426 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017302269088 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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