There are two different views on whether the modern world makes us more independent or more rely on others. As far as I am concerned, we are becoming by far more independent nowadays contrast to past time.
There are several reasons why some people think that we are more dependent on each other. Firstly, with the development of economy and society in the modern world, the living cost has increased dramatically. For example, the extremely high prices of housing prevent young workers from affording their own houses without their parents’ support. Secondly, team work, nowadays, plays a increasingly important role in our study and work; therefore, it is impossible for us to accomplish tasks very well without the cooperation with others. Thirdly, young couples seem to be more ambitious recently, both husbands and wives tend to have a full-time job, and they must depend on their parents or babysitters to take care of their young children.
However, I would agree with the opinion held by others who believe that people are more independent in recent time. There is no denying that families are becoming smaller and more dispersed in most modern cities, which mean family members mainly depend themselves to earn a living instead of rely on their relatives. In addition, young adult who just became a graduate tends to begin their career in metropolis, which means they may have to leave their parents and friends to start a new life alone. Moreover, the rapid growth of technologies makes it possible for us to work or study well without others’ assistance.
In conclusion, some reasons support the opinion people depend on each other, but my own view is that the modern world makes us more independent than ever.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...r more independent nowadays contrast to past time. There are several reasons why some ...
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Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t. Secondly, team work, nowadays, plays a increasingly important role in our stud...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05208333333 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66079857464 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8255745582 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.25 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302614452742 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125493360731 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122122284638 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215294874795 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764924608993 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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