Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academicresults, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that the question whether rewards should be given to learners gaining excellent academic results or those showing significant improvements in study remains a source of controversy in education field. While some people supporting students with highest scores have their own good arguments, I firmly believe that students making strides in their studies deserve to be awarded.
On the one hand, there is a variety of reasons why rewards should be given to students having excellent academic performances. One reason is to create highly competitive studying environment between students. This motivates learners to put great efforts into studying, aiming to get the highest scores in the study progress. Another reason worth mentioning is to provide encouragements for those passing tests with flying colors to pursue higher education or being admitted to top-tier schools in the future. My secondary school, for instance, selects the best students with the highest overall scores to participate in national competitions.
On the other hand, I side with those who advocate awarding to students improving their level of academic performance. The first benefit is to give equal chances for all learners. Some students with low marks in their tests are more likely to feel motivated and make significant progress, a factor leading to the decline of falling behind with study or dropping out of schools proportion. The second benefit is to instil in students the value of learning and holistic principle of learning, raising awareness that efforts are better than results. Consequently, several common phenomena occurring when examinations approach such as pressure, anxiety and cheating would be reduced.
In conclusion, despite arguments for high-ranking students with excellent academic performance, I am more in favor of those making strides in their studies deserve to be honoured and awarded.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
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Suggestion: with the highest
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Suggestion: get the highest
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Suggestion: selects the best
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Suggestion: with the highest
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51890034364 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85668513643 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59793814433 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7057737215 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.538461538 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197316070936 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661750467525 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054147704721 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120061043691 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524068940147 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.