Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
It is sometimes argued that children should be motivated to compete with others to grow up more useful. However, many believe that learning to co-work at a young age will bring better results. I'm in favour of the second opinion.
On the one hand, competition positively impacts children's development by motivating them to make progress relentlessly. However, the Drawbacks exceed the merit with two negative affect. Firstly, children who be taught to focus on competition tend to be more aggressive and more likely to start a conflict than others when they grow up. Secondly, being highly competitive makes children lose their childhood. The reason is because they have to practice and study much harder than their peers for the purpose of winning in every activity they attend.
On the other hand, cooperation also provides children with a huge advantage. It is easily recognized that co-work pushes productivity strongly, which means children can finish their tasks quicker and more effectively. Research is conducted in Japan with the participation of two groups of students from an elementary school. They are given the same puzzle task, with one team solving it independently and the other working in pairs. In the end, it pointed out that group divided into pairs have significantly higher results. Apart from making things easier and better, cooperation also teaches young people how to make friends and adjust to a public environment, which is essential to their life later, both in working and personal relationships.
In conclusion, while competition has some advantages for children's development, its disadvantages are equally significant. Therefore, from my point of view, cooperation should be adopted as a better manner of educating young children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 236.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6313559322 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00949791619 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.656779661017 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9675377436 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9285714286 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280381457033 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926991159234 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813236093761 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175263037226 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439083369088 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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