Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are tough to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
people have different views about what can help children become more useful adults, sense of competition or co-operate. I would argue that learn how to co-operate is more important than the sense of competition.
On the one hand, many people think children should be encouraged to compete with others . competition is a common phenomenon in modern society, which is because many resources is limited under a huge population. For instance, university filter student through tests, companies use variety form to judge whether the interviewee are suit for the job. As far as education is concerned, it is necessary to raise the sense of competition in children to make sure they can adapt the rhythm of society.
On the other hand, learn how to co-operate does make children become more useful adults. Resulting from the fact that human-being is not an individual object, we all need others help and coordinates. A lot of works involve thousands of people, such as large-scale engineering. Thus, children need the ability to cooperate with others to achieve success.
I hold the belief that the sense of competition is of vital importance for children, but they may become selfish and be anxious to achievement. There are also many competition as a team, so teach children how to co-operate with others can help them do better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1126.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 219.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14155251142 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84283934425 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607305936073 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.1194941904 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.8333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366544437541 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134818361482 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10208723627 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23136742706 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058021284697 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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