Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some people say that children should be promoted to compete at school. However, others think that it is of necessity to teach them a sense of collaboration so that they could become a good member of society. While competition is occasionally essential in the educational system, I believe that cooperation is more likely to have a long-lasting effect.
According to some people’s perspectives, children should be allowed to participate in various competing activities so that they could be more active and dynamic. This is the case because when engaging in competitions, they are able to expose underlying potential, which helps them to be independently successful. Besides, in today’s world, competitive markets are increasingly prevalent, which requires youngsters to strive independently to achieve success. For instance, a competition related to mathematics may lay the foundation for later learning in their careers as they could develop such skills as problem-solving, which may be vital when working in an independent environment.
However, alongside the influence of competition, I believe that a sense of collaboration would have a positive impact on children. The main reason is that being able to work in a group of people, this benefits the development of the whole child across social, cognitive, and emotional domains. For instance, when having a group discussion, not only could they freely express their thoughts and feelings but also learn from each other, point out mistakes, and make a contribution, which plays an indispensable role in the productivity and efficiency of a whole group. This example indicates that if children are taught to be cooperative earlier, their personalities and qualities will be enhanced.
In conclusion, although some say that schooling should give priority to the encouragement of competition among children, I argue that collaboration is of fundamental importance for later working and living.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57190635452 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34051939211 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588628762542 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0607270112 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.833333333 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229863775352 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928628420946 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730228556154 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152717923055 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556211308299 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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