Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have widely differing views about whether youngsters should be motivated to be more competitive or learn to work collaboratively to become responsible adults. In my opinion, I believe that these both skills have an equally enormous impact on children’s development.
On the one hand, cooperation skill, without doubt, plays a vitally crucial role in shaping useful adults. There is no denying the fact that working together minimize the risk of alienation among young people. Since they are all aiming toward the common goal, each of members may feel responsible for working thoroughly with others by communicating or developing rapport to fulfill the tasks. For example, to achieve the highest prize in any competition, participants in a group must discuss and planning with others to come up with new ideas and solutions that demand all members’ efforts.
On the other hand, there are reasons why adolescents are beneficial from learning to compete. Firstly, teenagers can, up to a point, learn to accept defeat as graciously as achieve the first prize by undertake the challenges. This is because winning is not always about coming in first place but to draw a great value of experiences from that to equip themselves to become self-sufficient adults in later life. Secondly, life is about competition. Hence, if we eliminate competition, we could be in danger of creating a generation of children who have a sense of entitlement. For example, many youngsters born in well-appointed conditions may take for granted the things that they receive from their parents which are difficult to acquire.
All things considered, while there are some reasons to prioritize cooperation in children’s life, my own view is that both competition and co-operate skill are equally measure to determine more balance young adults.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...us impact on children’s development. On the one hand, cooperation skill, with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3264604811 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00031685876 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635738831615 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0110481446 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.230769231 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222130792778 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645579698472 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075346060228 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146985309887 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912814150936 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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