Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sociologist and civil societies often make a debate about the growing education of children, whether they should learn to compete or cooperate, which would be have a more broader impact in their life and society as a whole. I would like to discuss both the views critically in the following essay.
Parents and teachers often emphasize on teaching the kids to learn how to compete and try to win over others. This is particularly intended to teach a children to be more success and productive in life. It also has broader impact in life; for example, more competitive childs are likely to survive more better than others in both professional and personal life. It helps to create a zest that children can use to be more succes and make prosperity in their professional career. That helps to exert a favourable situation in their professional environment and helps them to be stand out in the society. This is quite true in real life experience. As an example, I am not a highly meritorious person, but I have got a competitive mind. This criteria helps me to work hard for keeping grades up than my classmates, which in turn helped me to secure a prestigious job that many of my classmates could not make. Though are seemed to more meritorious than me.
On the other hand, sociologists emphasize on teaching children to be cooprative rather than competitive. This is because, teaching a children to be competitive might have a negative impact in osychology which would create harfful effect in society. For example, if a children learn to compete others for having a good career, if he or she can't do it in traditional way, they might want to get it by any means that would destabilize that social order. Rather, teaching children being cooperative would create many problems in our society. Particularly the corruption could be reduced to a significant level which is assumed to be the bad impact of teachnig children about the value of the wealth and career and tempting them to earn those by competitiveness. Which ultimately prsuade them committing corruption. If childrens are learned to be cooperative and moral, then they would value the happiness out of helping someone instead of stealing money by illegal means.
I personally feel that, it is necessary to teach children about the moral ethics, social norms, cooperativeness and sharing basic things woth others, but they also should get some competitive mind. Otherwise, out society would not be ameliorated gradually and it would be stalled at a certain point that one would feel any urgency to improve it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'broader' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: broader
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... views critically in the following essay Parents and teachers often emphasize on ...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
... This is particularly intended to teach a children to be more success and productive in li...
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Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...erson but I have got a competitive mind This criteria helps me to work hard for keep...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h are seemed to more meritorious than me On the other hand sociologists emphasize...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...an competitive This is because teaching a children to be competitive might have a negative...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...arfful effect in society For example if a children learn to compete others for having a go...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'cants'.
Suggestion: cants
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'norms'' or 'norm's'?
Suggestion: norms'; norm's
... children about the moral ethics social norms cooperativeness and sharing basic thing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 435.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8367816092 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79456089878 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464367816092 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 435.0 20.2975951904 2143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2104.0 106.682146367 1972% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 435.0 20.7667163134 2095% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 55.0 7.06120827912 779% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232627035768 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.232627035768 0.084324248473 276% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149512308509 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276219235103 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 218.9 13.0946893788 1672% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -370.05 50.2224549098 -737% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 172.9 11.3001002004 1530% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.27 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 28.3 8.58950901804 329% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 9.78957915832 572% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 176.0 10.1190380762 1739% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 219.0 10.7795591182 2032% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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