Some people think that students should work part-time in order to earn money to ensure better future opportunities, while others argue that they had better pay attention to their study so as to get good results. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often said that undergraduates ought to have part-time jobs during their school time, whereas some claim that they need to focus on their study instead of earning money. I completely agree with the idea that students should be encouraged to engage in part-time work to gain more than just money.
To begin with, there is no doubt that money is necessary in order for undergraduates to meet their basic needs. Therefore, a part-time job will allow them to at least pay for their tuition fees, as well as having a reasonable quality of life. Furthermore, it is evident that people nowadays are likely to find it hard to earn money, and working during school years will teach students to fully understand the true value of money in life, so that they will be able to form a saving habit, use money wisely and build spending plans, which are highly beneficial for their future. Although they might struggle to balance work and study, overcoming this will help them master time management to deal with deadlines effectively and achieve their goals as scheduled.
In my opinion, working while in college or university can offer many different advantages to students. Firstly, through earning, students may gain a feeling of confidence, independence, and pride in themselves, therefore they can realize their own value and have a sense of maturity. More importantly, these jobs will provide them with essential skills and useful experience that certainly improve their career prospects. For instance, because personal skills and practical experience are the key consideration when employing, candidates who have worked part-time in the past tend to be more attractive to employers when compared to those with no job experience at all.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that students with part-time work rather than those who only concentrate on study, will thrive in the society and thus, this trend need encouraging and promoting.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, at least, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11320754717 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72911047516 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59748427673 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.7349331524 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.818181818 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.4545454545 7.06120827912 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220082843843 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088773637669 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051867449684 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143315955907 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733703289427 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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