Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination Others think money and appearance are more important Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people perceive that hard work and determination play a vital role in success while others, in contrast, believe that looks and wealth are rather more significant. As per my accord, focus and effort must be prioritized definitely as they help us to reach great heights. This essay briefly analyzes both perceptions and provides information supporting my opinion.

To begin with, it is a well-established fact that most people who are currently successful had once worked relentlessly to pursue their dreams. With genuine effort and sheer will anyone can push their limits to a great extent and consequently, can be destined towards victory. For instance, although, the present prime minister of India was once a tea vendor, he strived hard to become a great leader acclaimed by many people. As a result, self-confidence develops and even the impossible tasks seem achievable.

On the other hand, some people are quite fascinated to look good and try to portray themselves to be ultra-rich. However, this will only grab the mere attention of the people around, which is just momentary, and nothing more significant can be attained. For example, many people think that they will be valued high based on their appearance and fortune but, this is only a misconception. The outcome is that these people carry false pride and once they realize the fact, feels intimidated about themselves.

In conclusion, hard work and determination are the major objectives that constitute success. Although some individuals are desperate to look wealthy and dazzling for the appreciation of others, it ultimately leads to embarrassing results.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...timately leads to embarrassing results
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, consequently, however, if, look, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17692307692 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84879295523 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 260.0 20.2975951904 1281% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1346.0 106.682146367 1262% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 260.0 20.7667163134 1252% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 183.0 7.06120827912 2592% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219285029892 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.219285029892 0.084324248473 260% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13076531953 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423736421201 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 133.0 13.0946893788 1016% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -192.42 50.2224549098 -383% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 104.7 11.3001002004 927% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.24 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 20.72 8.58950901804 241% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 9.78957915832 613% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 106.0 10.1190380762 1048% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 60.0 10.7795591182 557% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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