Some people think women should be given the same opportunity to work and excel just like men Others believe that a woman s responsibility should be limited to looking after children and housework What is your opinion Use relevant details and examples to s

The topic about the female had to take responsibility for care for the family instead of work outside. In my view point, I completely disagree with this statement.
Firstly, women go out to work to balance the family's finances. When both women and men go out to work, the amount of money they earn will be higher than only men work outside. As a result, their quality of life will be improved. Secondly, children need the care of both parents to develop better and happier. The man will not need to work over time to earn extra income if the woman also goes out to work. So they will have more time to build a happy family.
Nowaday, there are many cases where women have to take care of the family leading to mental and physical pressure. Therefore, they need a more relaxed and free environment. At the same time, working outside also helps women to showcase their talents. Some examples show that women can do better than men in many areas such as business, data processing, decoration, design, research,...In addition, women who go out to work will be more independent and receive more respect. They can do whatever they like without being stopped by their husbands.
In short, women need to be able to go out to work in addition to taking care of the family.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...processing, decoration, design, research,...In addition, women who go out to work ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...essing, decoration, design, research,...In addition, women who go out to work will...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thout being stopped by their husbands. In short, women need to be able to go ou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in short, such as, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1042.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59030837004 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41148287683 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568281938326 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2280615666 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.4285714286 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2142857143 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17231511851 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602780832381 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452787612511 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104717330586 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041132102604 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...processing, decoration, design, research,...In addition, women who go out to work ...
^^
Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...essing, decoration, design, research,...In addition, women who go out to work will...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thout being stopped by their husbands. In short, women need to be able to go ou...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in short, such as, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1042.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59030837004 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41148287683 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568281938326 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2280615666 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.4285714286 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2142857143 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17231511851 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602780832381 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452787612511 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104717330586 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041132102604 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.