Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Opinions diverge on whether reformed offenders are the best way to transfer about the danger of committing a crime to teenagers. Although some fervently advocate this sentiment, I am in the opposition owing to rational reasons.
Admittedly, reformed offenders can tell teenagers about their life in prison, how they involved in crime and the dangers of a criminal lifestyle. They can also dispel what criminal things would be glamorous to a young person. However, a crime normally is in the poor class, and they turn into illegal act to generate income. Therefore, their knowledge might be low which can be detrimental when they present. Besides, it is not denied that these offenders have completely given up to perform criminal activities again. I believe that they are not the best informative way about crime.
The alternative to educate teenagers about crime would be much more effective than reformed offenders is utilizing police officers. Perceptibly, figures of police officers have been educated from the fundamentals to the advanced information. This can be useful in terms of informing teens about what happens to lawbreakers when they are caught. Furthermore, their expertise about the myriad of shocking happens in criminal life would be attractive to students. This can also build a strong influence on children and have a powerful impact that results in an innate fear in them to involve any criminal activities.
In conclusion, I fully support the view that police officers are more effective to educate teenagers about the dangers of crime than the ex-offenders.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26086956522 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83942511508 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553359683794 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.9213882218 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.0714285714 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0714285714 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165797735753 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634800783058 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449815661805 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110460434681 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136960560701 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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