Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about dangers of committing a crime.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Crime education is one of the most principal importance in any countries throughout the world. While I agree that allowing ex-prisoners who turned over a new leaf to speak to teenagers about their experience is an effective way, I believe that there are better alternatives to this problem.
On the one hand, I agree that reformed criminals attracted to teenagers more than normal people when speaking about the life of prisoners is really like. A reason is these stories are originals with vivid evidences that teenagers may not have heard or witness before. For example, those who have been in prison would describe in detail a reason which made them become delinquents and then the process they had to suffer in both physical and mental sides in prison to pay the prices for their unlawful activities. Therefore, it is considered that a speech of used-to-be wrongdoers has a huge impact to young people.
Nevertheless, I also believe that combination of different forms of education would conduce to expected results compared to a reformed offender holding al talk. Firstly, parents have to take responsibility for educating their children about the laws when they at an early age. For instance, they would talk about what activities are legal and what those which break the laws and how to avoid them. Secondly, teachers at schools play an extremely important role in raising awareness and knowledge of students about crime through many activities such as watching documentary films about the real prison life, providing information about the negative affects to their life after released from prison in outside class-time activities.
In conclusion, while a talk given by reformed criminals is an effective way, but in my opinion, it is not the best education method for crime education.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13993174061 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76898049242 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610921501706 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.500950105 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.909090909 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.7272727273 7.06120827912 237% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211544809055 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723823940364 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417207195713 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118828123309 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391198996522 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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