Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel.
Do the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?
Nowadays, going straight to university or entering the workforce is not the only option for high school seniors. However, instead of these choices, taking a gap year, in which students defer university enrollment to travel or work, is significantly rising. Despite some obvious benefits of this trend, I would agree that these are outweighed by the disadvantages.
On the one hand, there are two major profits when students prefer to delay tertiary education for one year. First of all, gap year takers are afforded to experience and boost their potential, which helps them enrich their life experiences. For example, during this year, students can get a job and save money for paying their tuition fees. As a result, they can hone practical skills and have independent lives. The youngsters become more mature and figure out different aspects of life throughout this break. Second, the following benefit is that gap year allows new graduates to travel and immerse themselves in alien cultures. Especially, with many students who had made a decision to study abroad, they have to adapt quickly to their new environments and intensity all points such as languages, cultural knowledge or get familiar to the weather, local people, new lifestyles,... What they should do to acquainted with is taking a gap year so that they can learn about these things related to the districts.
On the other hand, I believe that the disadvantages of having a year-long break are more substantial than such benefits. A major drawback is that after a long rest, gap-year takers may fall behind their studies as well as facing peer pressure, which could possibly drain their self-confidence. For instance, during the gap year, high school leavers only pay attention to earn money, they put the whole study away and when they return to college, see their friends walked a thousand miles farther than them, they may lose momentum and feel discouraged before their new school year. In addition to this, high school seniors somehow find it hard to resume their education after a long time of being distracted from formal schooling. Consequently, students will take a while to recall both their knowledge and deep focus on studying, which affects the quantity of learning. Last but not least, these young individuals are unlikely to save up a lot of money or cultivate practical skills during the gap year. This can be attributed to the fact that they can not do great things yet or their occupations are just side hustles as they just left high school so their salaries are not well nor learn anything substantive.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the disadvantages of taking a gap year between high school and university are more noteworthy than the profits.
(I wrote it base on band 9 writings)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2326.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 464.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01293103448 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68680427491 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558189655172 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2089850469 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.3 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355502079998 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098931729593 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748316550909 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203444768634 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122988097599 0.056905535591 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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