With the development of the society, people start to consider how to create a more joyful society. Some of them hold on an idea that narrowing the gap between the rich and the poor can be the best way to improve the life standard. However, I disagree with this point to some extend. I will give supporting arguments to this view and provide other means to create a more joyful society.
Initially, there is a variety of means making a happier society. For instance, if the government could ensure the rights of citizens, such as fair chance of education, employment and health sevices, people would feel satisfied with the society. Takingthe Asia for example, it has a large population so that it's a bit different for the governments to preserve human rigrhts. Some people who are mediate-class even lower, they need to obey the rule standing in a line to wait for called in hospital, whereas, some rich people who are up-class have the privilege. Even in terms of education, some poor family cannot enjoy the education rights so the children can't receive good education, which is not helpful to enhance the whole sense of happiness.
Movermore, narrowing the gap between the richest and the poorest may can result in social decay to some extent. Money is a gteat motivator for most people because they can improve the life standards and gain a sense of accomplishment. However, the rich may not have the incentive to work harder and enterprises are also not willing to set uo a business,which is not condusive to social development. As a result, people may be unhappy with social decay.
On the other hand, there's no deny that it is useful to way to develop a happier socety. Paying tax can have important implications to a society. We should recogise that the government can achieve the goal of imcome redistribution by taxation. For example, in many countries the high income group needs to pay more high tax, while the low income group get assistance from the government, which not only can balance the gap in income, but also enhance people's happiness.
Overall, I am convinced that bridge the gap is a great way to improve life standards, but is not the only excellent approach,there are various means making a happier society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 41.998997996 33% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 391.0 1615.20841683 24% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 88.0 315.596192385 28% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44318181818 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.06281431361 4.20363070211 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30384941076 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 59.0 176.041082164 34% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670454545455 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 123.3 506.74238477 24% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8224708345 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.2 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0922242450637 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451625916815 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038648110851 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615435189932 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261378258336 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 12.4159519038 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 15.0 78.4519038076 19% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 22.4719101124 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 9
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