Task 2: Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this era, celebrities tend to widen their popularity through the massive property or luxurious lifestyle rather than their successes in their professions. However, with the majority of fans from teenagers, this leaves a controversial concern of the growing-up of them. Personally, to some extent, I agree with this statement as celebrities’ wealth has gone fairly over the top but in other cases, this does not reveal the whole scenario
On the one hand, these celebrities can be a great motivation for adolescents to thrive their best to become wealthy like them. As we are living in a hectic life and the highest target of every worker is to earn a lucrative income. Though the achievement of one individual is the outcome of their efforts and hardship, adolescents seem to be impressed more by those who have a wealth-off life because that is their dream. As a result, the more celebrities are known by their financial background, the more young people get influenced and start getting down to work seriously
On the other hand, as many juveniles look up to their idols as a standard model to learn after, this trend misdirects their total growing-up process. The most noticeable flaw is the improper materialistic viewpoint of others. By chasing down the appealing appearance, extravagant luxuries the adolescents ‘ appreciation towards inner values are undermined. For example, many teenagers take these lifestyles as a standard to judge people based on their condition instead of their characteristics or endeavor. In the long term, this leads to the exacerbation of the whole operating system from the perspectives of the others
In conclusion, I partly embrace this opinion as there are still some motivations can be taken by the adolescents and if not be taken into consideration this can be the beginning of a new generation that just concentrate on money and try all cost to earn a life as wealthy as their idols
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, still, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06875 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00197851425 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571875 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.787081695 49.4020404114 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.2 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312134182952 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109945202121 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873616609242 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17633491377 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637799029363 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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