Television dominates the free-time for too many people. It can make people lazy and
prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?
For most people around the world, television has become the main activity that consumes most
of their free time. Some are of the opinion that watching TV encourages laziness and social
isolation and I agree. Moreover, I think that watching too much television is directly correlated
with a person’s mental health and overall success in life.
Laziness and social isolation are the two main drawbacks associated with prolonged watching
of television. People are naturally designed to seek pleasure and when one is given the choice
between watching a new episode of their favourite TV show and studying for instance, most
people choose the former because of its short-term benefits. This results in people sacrificing
their future for the sake of entertainment. Additionally, people who spend more time in front of a
television screen have less time to interact with their social circle. This development is
detrimental, especially for children, because social interactions are essential in learning and
practicing social skills such as communication, cooperation and teamwork.
Furthermore, too much screen time has a negative impact on a person’s mental condition.
Firstly, television programmes are created in a way of delivering information in short bursts. This
contributes to the reduction of a person’s attention span. Consequently, people with shorter
attention spans find it difficult to focus on longer tasks, which is a necessary skill in the real
world. Secondly, for entertainment purposes, television programmes often showcase unrealistic
and illusional stories of real life situations which leads to people having unrealistic expectations
about their own lives. This often results in people being unhappy and dissatisfied about their life
which in turn may lead to various psychological disorders.
In conclusion, while watching television has become the dominating leisure activity worldwide, I
strongly believe that its effects on individuals are damaging.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82154882155 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14659390143 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569023569024 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3833538516 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.266666667 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191488472872 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651332856759 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400559527562 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0529793068053 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035357519089 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.