Humankind invented the most marvelous form of art , music . music has been considered as the most diverse and simple kind of art, which include your own voice . art are mostly disected into two categories ; Traditional and international one. although some argue that global form of music are more vital than the classical one , i believe the otherwise. in this essay, i will argue that original country music are better , and give evidence of our dependence on music.
indigenousity of traditional musical instrument are essential for a nation. These instrument provide a sense of proudness for certain civilians , because it gave them a sense of purpose to proud about to another nations. this is crucial, especially for a nation who lost their pride due to poverty, lack of monuments, and origins . a study by scotland university cites that their civilians are proudly present their pride to international community about their country . furthermore, it also triggers the action of patriotism. from the history, we could learn that music repeatedly generate the movement of people, because music could affect how we behave to local society. the war of Netherland shows a excellent evidence of it.thus, i believe that original music that belongs to a country provide more positive impacts rather than international music.
Our mood are often determined by Musical instrument . Music is known to provide mental and psychological support toward those who listen to it. by solely listening onto a certain concert, it could turn our laugh into tears in a matter of second. however, most of us purposely utilize use it to calm our mind and focus to a certain subject. a study that was published by Cambridge university stated that Musics are basically the soundwave that control our brain unconciously. therefore, we must aware that whatever video that we are listening at are possibly could cause detrimental impact to our mind.
In conclusion, Despite the Influence of Pop culture music in the current century, i still firmly believe that traditional music carry More positive impact rather than pop music. and although music probably could control our mind, most of them are advantegous towards of psychological state and daily action.
- There are many different types of music in the world today Why do we need music Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays 67
- There are many things that motivate a person to work but money is the most compelling In your opinion how influential is the power of money 81
- Some people believe when famous people support international aid it makes the general public think about it Others think they make the problem less important Discuss both views and give your own opinion 84
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, second, so, still, therefore, thus, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22284122563 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81744562819 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557103064067 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8491283018 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.75 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.95 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.01903807615 638% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369464235419 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119244484961 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996373060109 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246771474529 0.151304729494 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664229729634 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.