These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Time is altering and so is the enthusiasm of people from all walks of life to participate in entertaining events like those of sports or cultural. Whether squandering a hefty amount of money to do so has advantageous virtues or not has sparked a heated debate. Although this universally prevalent trend is somehow refuted by some as an unacceptable manner, it will be shown by this essay that this may not be the case. Aside from its recreational perspectives for escaping away from monotonous lifestyles, this can act as a precursor to financially sponsoring the target events. Throughout the following paragraphs, these points will be meticulously scrutinized to advocate this adequately rational standpoint.
For one, attending such astonishingly mesmerizing events, irrespective of their expenses, without a shadow of a doubt, is a golden opportunity for busy people under the tremendous pressure of their overwhelmingly demanding job responsibilities. Take a senior manager in the Microsoft corporation, suffering from a sedentarily stressful lifestyle owing to her extremely heavy professional duties without any definite entertainment, as an illustration. Doing so, without any enticing activity like going to cultural activities, such as her favorite pop concert, she will be prone to become sick by an extensive diversity of mental diseases like major depression, as time goes by. It, hence, is illustrated by this glaringly apparent example that attending some enthralling enough events like cultural ones can act as a catalyst for people to feel invigorated by escaping from their hectic lifestyles. Thus, not only are not these kinds of, somewhat, expensive recreations disadvantageous, but they can play an indispensable role to boost people’s energy.
More significantly, having said that by embarking upon these astounding events by people, these undeniably lucrative practices can conspicuously be financially sponsored. Never can it be denied that a tremendous amount of funds can be raised by an extremely preponderant final tournament which is held between two utterly triumphant soccer teams like Manchester and Bayern in London, England, for instance. By this example, it is crystal clear that people’s attendance at such these sporty events, undoubtedly, can act as a catalyst to financially uphold sports communities, to a great extent. purchasing sports tickets, hence, is strikingly beneficial for sports fields, financially speaking.
To recapitulate, after careful situational analysis of irrefutable virtues of spending a large amount of fortune to buy events’ tickets such as either sports or cultural ones, in terms of entertaining people as well as raising funds for sports, questioning this practice deems too superficial. It is, therefore, hoped these viewpoints will be taken into account by people from all walks of life in the foreseeable future, the world over.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Time is altering and so is the enthusias...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e this adequately rational standpoint. For one, attending such astonishingly me...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le role to boost people's energy. More significantly, having said that by ...
^^
Line 4, column 601, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Purchasing
... sports communities, to a great extent. purchasing sports tickets, hence, is strikingly be...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r sports fields, financially speaking. To recapitulate, after careful situation...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, such as, as well as, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 1615.20841683 153% => OK
No of words: 442.0 315.596192385 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60859728507 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33676660614 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595022624434 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 506.74238477 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8549283458 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.9375 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.625 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205136192042 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670359456796 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374297253983 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129603336172 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211831412839 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 78.4519038076 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.