It is sometimes argued that whether the high selling of mass consumption are influenced by the effect of advertisement or the real needs of the consumers. In my opinion, our consumption behavior are deeply shaped by modern advertising.
So far, the advertising industry has changed our shopping habits in many ways. Firstly, we received much more advertisements than before. There are numerous mass media helping companies to sell products, such as TV, radio, even films. Secondly, brand building combines the goods with some specific meanings, such as popularity, richness, kindness and fashion. Finally, the relation between people and things becomes different. Who we are depends on whether we own some kind of things or whether we can afford to buy it.
Our society structure builds our behaviors of shopping invisibly. The amount of goods exceed our real needs causes several physical problems of individuals, resulting the feeling of worry and nervousness. Some people make a resolution to deal with lust for things, and others follow the pioneers. For example, a program where a Japanese housewife teaches family to throw away things gets popular in the past years. Besides, another trend called Minimalism, which was launched by two middle-aged white men have a wide and effective influence around the world. The ethos of minimalism is owning minimal things that you need.
In conclusion, the modern industry of advertisement has numerous powerful ways to sell products to consumers even if they don't really need them. Luckily, human are not in control of advertising and marketing completely. We can control ourselves with resolution and reasonable methods.
- Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment 61
- More and more people work from home and study from home with the development of computer technology. DO you think it is positive or negative development? 56
- More and more people work from home and study from home with the development of computer technology. DO you think it is positive or negative development? 61
- Some people believe that anyone can create art such as painting, poetry, music and so on. Others think that a person should have special abilities to create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 84
- Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the society in which they are sold.To what extent do you agree or disagree. 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ound the world. The ethos of minimalism is owning minimal things that you need. In con...
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Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...sell products to consumers even if they dont really need them. Luckily, human are no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37262357414 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84041870675 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665399239544 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9703582437 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1176470588 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4705882353 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108079837322 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303952747746 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315692931929 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0645319346184 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268533124708 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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