TOPIC 3: What are the benefits of requiring young people to serve the army? Does participation in community work qualify as an alternative?
In peacetime, the issue concerning whether military responsibility will remain to be an obligatory task for the young generation is recently open to debate. In my opinion, while military training has its own merits, some alternatives including social activities can be taken into account.
On the one hand, military training obviously brings a wide range of benefits to both nations and individuals. In terms of the whole country, the requirement for military duty for youngsters becomes a useful defense in the event of international conflicts. If countries do not brace themselves, they may succumb to unforeseeable attacks.. On a personal level, joining the army equips the young with some fundamental soft skills, especially a sense of responsibility. In such a strictly regulated environment, youngsters will hone self-control and time-management skills to complete their training tasks, otherwise they have to endure harsh punishments.
On the other hand, despite the mentioned advantages of joining the army, several alternatives seem appropriate including social work. Instead of armed fighting, governments should reach agreement on a peace treaty for the common good . Thus, several campaigns for educating the young about international relationships and also improving their negotiating skills are considered to be crucial. Through those social organizations, youngsters may become a potential diplomat in the future who can maintain the peaceful status of the world. A range of vital soft skills which can be derived from community work are worth considering. Needless to say, in recent years, a list of annoying problems such as unmanageable pollution and natural disasters has significantly emerged in our life. Hence, youngsters should be aware of such situations and apply themselves to some volunteer activities for the sake of protecting our living.
In conclusion, military requirements have considerable benefits for the young generation, but community work as an alternative does hold the same values that are worthy of attention. .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67637540453 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25198518073 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62783171521 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1430189849 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.933333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154978342815 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496009966965 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766138017721 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126005104563 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108589560028 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.