Topic: In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
The obesity rate among children is becoming a serious issue, especially in western countries, where a large amount of unhealthy food is excessive consumption in daily basic. In this regard, some people point out that government should do whatever they can to improve this situation. In my point of view, I think that we should not consider government are the ones who responsible to combat childhood obesity crisis.
Undeniably, the final decision of any national crucial sector is putting on the shoulder of national leaders. Whenever a serious threat comes, such as obesity, the government should be the one who acknowledge this, finding effective solutions. Their uttermost role is meeting citizen’s basic needs and guaranteeing well-being of society. Apart from encouraging youngsters to choose healthy choice and exercise regularly, obviously, governments do not have any further to play.
The fact is that parents influence significantly on eating habits and lifestyle of children, therefore they are captains on a battle combating obesity. It can be seen that an obese child is often malnourished because its meal lacks of nutrients, vitamins, vegetables or containing a lot of sugar, which reveals the poor choice of parents on daily meals. It is true that parents have huge impact on improving children’s health by supplying more healthy meals. Moreover, obesity is causing by lacking of physical activities or a tendency life style which is becoming favoring choice of numerous teenagers. Only parents are the ones who are able to navigate children’s decision or force them to do more exercise.
In conclusion, governments of course do what they can do to curb the obesity pandemic, no matter small impacts it have. However, I fell that parents of obese children are being blame, thus they should take responsibility for their children’s unhealthy condition.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 365, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a responsible'.
Suggestion: who is a responsible
...ld not consider government are the ones who responsible to combat childhood obesity crisis. ...
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Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...ty pandemic, no matter small impacts it have. However, I fell that parents of obese ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, apart from, i think, in conclusion, of course, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37837837838 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94060233192 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618243243243 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1091168303 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.714285714 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227153529811 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738162488431 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561784583434 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145948277111 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718074815176 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.