In the highly developed digital world, the requirement of well-trained labor workforce with modern knowledge has taken the parents attention when they decided their children career path at least in the first years. It is obvious that the education curriculum includes more academic subjects with majority of time in class in comparison to one or two meetings for physical and art classes. After a number of studies about the limitation of students’ ability nowadays have been extensively picked over and examined in many reports and studies, government as well as parents, should consider the radical changes in their off- spring education pathway. The idea of sole choice of core subjects in education system with the reduction in physical and art class may result in the failures in the whole development process of the children, however is the obvious way to achieve flying color results by devoting more time in it.
In recent year, the school authority has created new learning systems with the increase of compulsory subjects that are tested in the most examination such as the graduated test. It is more challenging in the entrance exam from any level of education that causes stressful and pressures for students due to the competitiveness in enrolment process and complex exam structure. As the result, students have spent most of their time for learning core subjects that likely to account for part of the test score. With the careful preparation and revision, they become more confident when taking the exams and thus to pass the exam with high results. Secondly, the education curriculum in some countries, for example Vietnam, may include the excessive load of the many subjects that they believed it would provide the general education for students, irrespective of their interest. Because of the limitation of time period, the students solely have the choice of put more efforts in revisions that leads to the lack of time for their hobbies. Therefore, the dramatical decrease in class of art work and physical education has been suggested by both parents and school authorities in order to assist their off-springs in future preparation for career path.
The adverse effects of this solution, which is expected to be more serious in the children’s lifestyles, have raised the public debate in studies and newspaper. In details, first of all, in terms of health status, the students after the long term learning with less time engaging in physical exercise and art activities have become weaker than before. In fact, it is common to view the image of young ones in stressful and tired condition which emphasizes the demand of recreation. In the result, ability classes, for example art work and sport, act as an effective way of refreshment to alleviate the studying pressure. Moreover, there are some cases of disorders and psychology related diseases result from the totally active in right brain which are regarding to optional subjects.
In conclusion, the balance of development in both intellectual and physical sides should be applied in order to make student life become better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...rce with modern knowledge has taken the parents attention when they decided their child...
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Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to core'
Suggestion: to core
...e spent most of their time for learning core subjects that likely to account for par...
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Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ch emphasizes the demand of recreation. In the result, ability classes, for exampl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, at least, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 41.998997996 214% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 25.0 8.3376753507 300% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2619.0 1615.20841683 162% => OK
No of words: 505.0 315.596192385 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18613861386 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73638003725 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516831683168 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 506.74238477 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.7667691063 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.058823529 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7058823529 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0588235294 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163574639836 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538650793453 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413898210208 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085041459275 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614630772227 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 78.4519038076 190% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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