Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people claimed that if using computer everyday could have more negative than position effects on children , and I tend to agree that. Partly, in virtue of sitting in front of screen for a long time , it will be very bad for health , especially for eyes.
However, the fact is, parents usually concern much more the effective of activities from computer which attract to their children. The first factor is game, it’s also the most considerable concern. Children usually like playing the electronic games which are useless and tend to be violent. It is not good that they usually form many bad customs while playing game, that is swearing, typically . Actually, They have a tendency to angry and trash when losing in the game race so they relive them by swearing or they may get familiar with friends.
For some reasons, if children use computer too much, they can become to be passive in everything. They spend much time on chatting with friends on Facebook , Skype or Email .. instead of talking together by face to face .Besides, the limitation of their creative power or the big ideas originate in available information on Internet , because searching on computer will be always faster and fuller than thinking by theirselves or asking someone . This is the main reason that prove for gradual decreasing of the interaction between people .But anyway, we can’t deny the great benefits of computer. They’re so useful in studying , working, relaxing unless they are used appropriately.
In conclusion , parents should let their children participate in outdoor activities in lieu of sitting at home with a computer , in my view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, anyway, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08888888889 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67785022504 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648148148148 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8584979967 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.692307692 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.01903807615 518% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190843277197 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704743300609 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102287166598 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117648616999 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661919150586 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.