Video records are a better way to learn about the way other people in the world live rather than written documents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, due to the startling development of the technology, humans can gain knowledge about the world thanks to video clips . Therefore, opinions differ as to whether it is much better to learn about the living methods of other people in the world via video records in lieu of studying through documents. Although some experts opine that learning though video clips is the best choice, I would argue that witten documents still play such a fundamental role in helping individuals broaden their mind.
On the one hand, there are a host of factors prevailing people on thinking that video clips can be the most suitable method to know more about the lives of other individuals. Firstly, video records enable learners to imagine the ways people live more easily and lively compared to reading documents. For example, my friends are prone to watch videos on Youtube relating to the life of African in Egypt or Sudan. As the result, they are capable of accumulating more information about the cultures and costumes of native people. Furthermore, it is time-saving for video clips to be posted on social media. To illustrate, it may take a only half an hour for a person to record the living methods of inhabitants in other nations and put videos on Youtube or Facebook. Thus, those having desire to learn about other’s cultures find it easy to access to these sources of knowledge.
On the other hand, a chain of justifications have persuaded me to believe that written articles are paramount in assisting humans in learning more about the world. The first justification is that knowledge contained in books may be more reliable than that provided by video recoreders since books are evaluated deliberately before being published. As a result, learners can have access to true information. Moreover, written or printed texts can be stored in libaries for a long time. This may facilitate learners to gain information about the living methods of other customs which have been deleted by social media. If documents are no longer utilised, people would have to face a lot of obstacles to accumulate knowledge
In conclusion, admittedly, learning about the world via videos can be considered to be an ideal option; However, I would think that books or written documents are indispensable in helping individuals to broaden their horizons.
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| 2023-08-26 | dominhthanh | 73 | view |
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 386.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05958549223 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7645946408 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523316062176 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7848508798 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0625 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300733196759 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962045168625 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714364482496 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185261645451 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447150208059 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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