Some people argue that corporates should care about social responsibilities rather than only making profits. I totally agree with the statement, companies should pay back to our society when they have ability to do so.
There are many negative effects from businesses activities intentionally and unintentionally. Firstly, of manufacturers leave pollutant or even toxin to the river where we need to consume it. Those things make air pollution and poisoned river. Secondly, small businesses are being destroyed by many multi-national companies because local company are not competitive comparing to those bigger ones, there are huge number of job vacancies. Finally, after they ruined our environments and destroyed our local businesses, they hire our people to work with them. However, the wage is never be reasonable we are paid the lowest rate that companies are allowed. Everything is worse when big companies come to our community it affects to our people and environment.
On the other hand, it is necessary for wealthy companies to help our society back. First, they can reduce amount of pollutant they release, unless they should find any protocol to prevent those pollution, for example, wastewater treatment requires to be installed in every manufacturer. Secondly, there are a lot of poor people in society, so companies set up foundation helping for education, foods and clothes. It is not be easy to operate those by a company but a cluster like 10 companies in the same community is not far from impossible.
In conclusion, I agree that companies should help together to manage their environment and living in their society.
- The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 73
- The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. 78
- Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 73
- The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 586, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...k with them. However, the wage is never be reasonable we are paid the lowest rate ...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this pollution' or 'those pollutions'?
Suggestion: this pollution; those pollutions
...hey should find any protocol to prevent those pollution, for example, wastewater treatment requ...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...education, foods and clothes. It is not be easy to operate those by a company but ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29770992366 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97211365674 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625954198473 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4872096432 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1428571429 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.071161582807 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280375677922 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380610330703 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0575568379558 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562629171201 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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