As modern technology gradually changed our lives, some people argue that the old patterns of living and skills should be discarded. However, I hold a totally opposite view that the dismerits should abandoned and the merits should be retained.
It is true that majority of the old techniques are not applicable to today’s market as it is extremely inefficient compared with modern methods. For example, people used to commute by horses and camels. It is hard to imagine we ride horses to work or study nowadays. The difference of knowledge determines most of modern man can not accept the old lifestyles, such as ignorance of hygiene. The extreme harmful ways of lives such as corseting in Europe and bending feet in China should remain abandoned without hesitation.
Nevertheless, traditional skills about art and aesthetics such as paper-cutting and blowing sugar figures need to be reserved because of their deeper spirits. Paper-cutting and pottery-making have been as the part of the intangible cultural heritage. Different from the products made by factory, the paper and pottery works functioning as the conveyer of culture and history need to be passed in generations. Same as those skills, some of the old living ways were inherited and recognized as customs. A case in point is that Chinese spring festival can be dated back to 5000 B.C., and we still celebrate it every year as it conveys the essence of culture values — reverence of nature and esteem of ancestors.
To conclude, abandoning all conventional skills and lifestyles is an unwise act, modern man should preserve the essence and discard the dross of the tradition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, so, still, for example, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14498141264 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88199768259 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60594795539 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.124863986 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.461538462 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.042384978067 0.244688304435 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0143115748087 0.084324248473 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0164224309004 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0246358212648 0.151304729494 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00486114307189 0.056905535591 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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