When the time comes to commence full-time employment, individuals who have graduated from university deserve a high salary than those who have not.To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In competitive today's world, education plays a pivotal role in the improvement and promotion a society especially in third world countries in which people hope to get a bright future by pursuing it. personally, I agree with the following idea that educated individuals deserve to receive a higher salary compared to people without education. this essay will elaborate and justify this point of view.

Firstly, since graduation is based on merit, educated individuals have become eligible and worthy persons that gain the graduation certificate in the long period of time study. Students progress in universities by studying in a particular field and after passing hard exams and difficult experiences they become the specialist and skilful members in their own study field for society. For instance, an educated sports coach compared to an experimental sports coach not only spends more time on fundamental body physiology but also knows how important to understand it. Thus, compared to people who did not effort for acquiring the education they have more worthy to get a higher salary.

Secondly, education is very important that most of the developed countries not only consider special facilities for it but also know educated people as worthy persons to get a higher salary than the other. Many people who study in a particular field have an especial ability in a dynamic thought. Their ideas and priceless opinions are worthy to receive high salary and perks compared to a person without a graduation certificate who even do not familiar with such ideas. For example, a general practitioner has not special and valuable ideas compared to an expert neurologist about the illnesses. Therefore, being able and precious this people is related to their knowledge.

Thirdly, development of job strategy is a powerful ability that its foundation shapes from universities. educated people with job strategy can recognize the most pivotal challenges and determine companies' strategy based on these. In addition, having a job strategy lead to being responsible for companies' purposes. For instance, an educated person can easily control value activities which lead to acquiring profit. Hence, educated individuals deserve to get a higher salary and perk because they can be more useful for a company.

In conclusion, personally, I believe that a higher salary and a bright future is an encouragement and a motivation for worthy people who pursue their education and be more useful for societies. Education helps them to have dynamic thought, job strategy and enough skill.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33088235294 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83943195844 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495098039216 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 506.74238477 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9473395343 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.473684211 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164293610418 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572209310088 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486692907442 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976361007225 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302739246698 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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