Everyone has a dream and a goal that they have a great effort to reach a champion for themselves. In one’s opinion, there are many external elements to lead to success or achieve target in our life such as professional knowledge, determination and luck. Therefore, I disagree that majority of aims be decided by luck.
On the one hand, having the determination and knowledge could reach a great part of their aims. Take Nguyen Ngoc Ky example for, a handicapped teacher in Viet Nam, when he was four years old, he was paralyzed, but he tried his best to overcome difficulty in order to become a excellent teacher and be the first teacher to write by his foot. Therefore, hard work and enthusiasm might be the answer for success.
On the other hand, Nguyen Ngoc Ky might be more successful if he is in luck with a common body like other people, anyway he achieves his dream. Hence, fortunate is only a small factor to contribute to all process. Likewise a student couldn’t get good mark in the majority of test only bases on his luck. However, lucky could be the last element to decide the success if other mental and physical factors have been prepared beforehand. For example, a student is very good at physics but he suddenly gets into an accident on the day of the test. However, if he drove more carefully then the result would have been better.
In conclusion, I agree that people want to reach their goal fast, it need many element and one of those could be luck.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 274, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... overcome difficulty in order to become a excellent teacher and be the first teac...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
...ll factor to contribute to all process. Likewise a student couldn't get good mark i...
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Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun element seems to be countable; consider using: 'many elements'.
Suggestion: many elements
... want to reach their goal fast, it need many element and one of those could be luck.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, hence, however, if, likewise, then, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1218.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59622641509 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58939425738 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592452830189 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5985430636 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6923076923 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0910610920898 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386987280308 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540658056699 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.07287324832 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472892825625 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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