Write about the following topic:
There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Write at least 250 words.
These days, youngsters really stress to triumph in traditional school subjects. This has lead to a few individuals vocalizing that extra-curricular activities such as physical training and cooking classes are not as important as the other practical subjects and thus, demand that these courses be excluded from the school curriculum to allow the pupil to focus on academic subjects. This essay disapproves of the above statement as the extra-curricular subjects make the school learning more interesting and gives learning opportunities to those interested in vocational skills.
Non-academic subjects are crucial for school life as they create an interesting learning environment. Such courses give the student an opportunity to get away from the difficulty of learning intellectual subjects like Maths and History and relax their overburdened minds during such periods and thus creates an interest in the child to attend school for the sake of such extra-curricular activities. For example, students that excel at sports may try to perform well at academics too, so that they can acquire a sports-related scholarship for their higher education.
An additional requirement for non-traditional subjects to be included is that these courses provide a learning platform for students to develop vocational skills. As a consequence, it gives the pupil a chance to realize their natural skills and talents by exploring their creativity. This also allows them the opportunity to decide whether they would like to proceed further in non-academic fields and pursue their careers as a chef or an artist or an athlete. Excluding such subjects takes away the opportunity from the student to familiarize themselves with the knowledge of learning creative skills. For example, a student might be naturally talented at painting, but if not given the opportunity to explore their skills at school, they might never realize that they can pursue their career as an artist and be equally successful as doctors or engineers.
The above essay disagrees that practical subjects should be left out of the school syllabus so as to give students more time to pay attention to academic subjects because those subjects create a less boring learning environment at school and give the chance to academically lower-performing students to recognize their creative or practical talents and thus not lose their self-confidence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ould be left out of the school syllabus so as to give students more time to pay attentio...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, thus, well, as to, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48517520216 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16054028626 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493261455526 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.4180257741 49.4020404114 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.583333333 106.682146367 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9166666667 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174172467125 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746922603806 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496537427446 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126789399469 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299013836341 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 13.0946893788 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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