Write about the following topic.
When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous.
In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
People often associate success with being affluent or well-known. While such link is explicable, I believe that successful people should be recognized by how much they contribute to their society and their personal levels of satisfaction in life.
On the one hand, being rich and famous could be a good indicator of a successful person for several reasons. Forefront among them is that those who earn a lot of money and gain widespread recognition often have to work hard to earn their spot. For instance, billionaires like Oprah or Bill Gates are world-renown for their incredible work ethic, which is reflected in the numerous projects they launch and the profound impacts they exert in their fields (television for Oprah and technology for Bill Gates). However, it is noteworthy that a considerable proportion of wealthy people are heirs and heiress. In other words, they are born into success, instead of having to work for it.
On the other hand, I hold the view that people's levels of success should be measured based on two other criteria: their contribution to their community and their feelings of contentment. To begin with, there are jobs that neither attract public attention nor hefty paychecks but are still important to our society. Lesser known street cleaners and food inspectors, whose work help to ensure cleaner roads and safer food, are good examples. Furthermore, there is more to success than just money and fame as it is also about personal sense of satisfaction. For instance, while teachers may not earn as much as celebrities, their impact on young generations and the affection and respect they receive from their students fill them to feel content nonetheless.
In conclusion, while I acknowledge that defining success in terms of finance and popularity is reasonable, I am convinced that there are other valid criteria, which are social contribution and personal contentment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 683, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cess, instead of having to work for it. On the other hand, I hold the view that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17741935484 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81102519432 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587096774194 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0235580203 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.461538462 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182342793886 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729773575837 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574087770302 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117837231903 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336550469028 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.