Young people should spend more time on cultural activities such as music and theatre and less time sport. How far do you agree with this statement ?
No one can deny the fact that sport is favourable to people. However, many teenagers spend a great deal of time on sport. In my opinion, young people need to participate in more cultural activities than sports because of the following reasons.
Participating in cultural activities brings a lot of clear benefits to people. Firstly, it yields various psychological rewards because it helps us relax and reduce stress. For example, every time I am under stress, I usually go to the theatre to see a comedy film with my best friends at night weekend. This helps me feel happier and more comfortable. Secondly, we are able to broaden our understanding of the culture and history of our country. For instance, if we take part in a local festival, we will have a good chance to understand the reason and meaning of this festival by attending its activities. We don’t need to look for this information on the Internet, thanks to enjoyable activities of festivals we can easily learn new things.
Moreover, by attending cultural activities, young people can develop the interaction with others. As a result, we will have a lot of new friends and build new relationships with the people around us. Besides, these activities help remain and develop traditional cultural activities of the country. My aunt, for example, took part in a flower festival in Da Lat and she shared her valuable experiences at the festival with my family members. From that time, my family regularly participate in it every year. This lead to cultural activities become popular than before because a vast majority of people know them.
In conclusion, I believe that we should spend more time to participate in cultural activities because there are plenty of advantages including mental rewards, interaction with people, knowledge and the long-term survival of cultural activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10163934426 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90882688572 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560655737705 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.192691044 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5294117647 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9411764706 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275058965641 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897822018543 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630686513455 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194078025983 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461598464878 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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