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Nowadays, lots of teenagers fail to succeed because of the choices they make. A wrong choice may cost them the chance to be successful. I If a person let others into the decision-making process, this may help that person succeed, because more people usually mean better choices. However, I still think a person sometimes should make the decision alone, because of the following reasons.
First of all, in case of an emergency when people have to make time-sensitive decisions, making decisions in group may not be a good choice.,. Car accidents and natural disasters are very common, if a person meets these emergency problems, they have no time to wait for others to help them to make the choice, so they need to be independent. For instance, when a person with his daughter has a car accident, he must get out of the car in a moment otherwise, he may die inside the car. and in that time he needs to decide, to save his daughter or get out of the car. if he waits for other people, he and his daughter may all die inside the car. so they need to decide for themselves for some time.
Secondly, people need to be independent. Every people need to be independent because when they go to work, they sometimes need to decide for themselves. So if they’ve never made any decisions by themselves before, they will rely on others to help them make the call, and this causes them to lose the ability to make the decisions. So, they must be independent, so that they can make the correct choices when the time comes.
Somebody will say people always make incorrect choices, this may make them lose the chances to be successful. However, if a person always lets others to do the choice, when they get it wrong, that person will think is others' problem and won’t improve. And if the wrong choice is made by themselves, they can’t blame others and find the correct way to solve the problem, so that when they meet the problem next time, they won’t do it again.
As a result, I think people sometimes letting others make the decisions are better because people need to be independent, and they need to make choices when an emergency event happened. And let others make the decision may not help that person, I think people can help that person to decrease the range of the problem or give some advice is okay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 415.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59277108434 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48306910239 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414457831325 0.561755894193 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.10420841683 475% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3104572221 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.315789474 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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