Both the rich and the poor find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

It is known today that getting an admission in the university has become very difficult both by poor and rich people. I completely disagree with this point because universities are occupying students from a well rich people but must give a required percentage of space for poor people who wants an admission in top universities. In this essay I am going to discuss about some points related to this essay.

On one hand, people from an advantaged background gets an easy access to top universities with no queries and at any time admission process. It is observed in a research that university admissions are increased this year with the students from highly advantaged backgrounds. These studies have shown that people earning more than $1Million are getting admissions fixed without the clearance of entrance examinations.

On the other hand, the poor people finds it difficult in which only 20% of the students are from disadvantaged backgrounds while the students from middle class backgrounds gets a little more chance subsequently, leading to less number of students. Universities must take a step to give better advice and support they need in a highly competitive admission process.

I believe that it is vital that government must ensure that all young people regardless of where they live and go to school have a high quality career advice and guidance that allows them to make informed choice. They must be given equal importance in terms of their career admission.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
...ople from an advantaged background gets an easy access to top universities with no queries and...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a Million'.
Suggestion: A Million
...ave shown that people earning more than Million are getting admissions fixed without th...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... highly competitive admission process. I believe that it is vital that governme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 243.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10288065844 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8111363831 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592592592593 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8326965138 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147761620297 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605631586961 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752925215227 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842737235351 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681887418815 0.056905535591 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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