In class, you have been discussing the statement “Old members should be looked after by the members of their family or it is better for them to live in nursing-home. Your teacher has asked you to write an essay express your own opinion.
Nowadays, it is commonly argued whether it is better for the elderly to be taken care by their family members or to live in a nursing home. From my point of view, I suppose that nursing-home should be a better choice as it is beneficial for both themselves as well as the whole family.
There are a number of undeniable reasons that make people do not want their parents to live in nursing homes. First and foremost, living apart from families causes homesickness with a variety of different levels. It is hard for family members to pay a visit to nursing homes regularly and spend time with their parents, especially when they live so far apart. Secondly, caring service in nursing homes are possibly unaffordable for some families due to its expense. Many households still do not have good financial conditions to pay pricey caring service for their parents, which may lead to stress and pressure for the whole families. Thirdly, living in nursing homes is also considered to be loss of freedom and independence. The elderly has to adapt into the environment where everyone wakes up, has meals, and sleeps at consistent time every day. In fact, the old possibly have to adjust their routines because their schedules may not be the same as those in nursing homes, which can make them feel extremely uncomfortable and tired to change when getting into the new habitat and condition.
On the other hand, the option to choose to accommodate in nursing homes are obvious for several positive aspects of it. The first considerable reason is that nursing homes can make sure to provide the elderly with extreme care every day. Their programs consist of different services for the old such as: health care, daily routine management, eating habits witness, which can help to prevent family members from concerning about their parent’s health condition from time to time. Moreover, the old people are likely to be more communicative and less emotional when living with their peers. The old talking openly to others who are at the same ages as them in nursing homes can prohibit the sense of isolation. They will no longer wait for their family members who are always busy to come home or chat with them cheerfully in the loneliness and separation. Furthermore, caring service for old people are beneficial not only for themselves but also their families. All adults have to work every day, except for the weekend, and that is the reason why they cannot always carefully look after the elderly, or they can even be distracted when working because of worrying about their parents’ safety all the time. Therefore, nursing homes are the best choice for both to live their own lives better.
In conclusion, it is a high tendency that people take the elderly to nursing homes for better care and security, apart from the drawbacks. In the future, it is hopeful that there are more positive developments in nursing homes to benefit society.
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- In class you have been discussing the statement Old members should be looked after by the members of their family or it is better for them to live in nursing home Your teacher has asked you to write an essay express your own opinion 73
- In class you have been discussing the statement Old members should be looked after by the members of their family or it is better for them to live in nursing home Your teacher has asked you to write an essay express your own opinion 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...as it is beneficial for both themselves as well as the whole family. There are a number ...
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Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: OBVIOUS_FOR[1]
Message: The adjective obvious is normally used with 'to': 'obvious to several'.
Suggestion: obvious to several
...ose to accommodate in nursing homes are obvious for several positive aspects of it. The first consi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, well, apart from, as to, except for, i suppose, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1615.20841683 151% => OK
No of words: 499.0 315.596192385 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87775551102 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52284313643 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486973947896 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 506.74238477 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5769814196 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.904761905 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7619047619 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292755141597 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105509087103 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579976019403 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204696925519 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599646571286 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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