Employment and education were two factors which usually go hand in hand, however in the contemporary world due to various technology changes academic and job opportunities have become indirectly proportional. There are also discussions about ceasing the mandate on secondary education in some countries which has low percentage jobs. I disagree with the thought of restricting the higher education and also/[at the same time i] believe that the standard and curriculum in schooling has to be tweaked in such a way that it brings more occupation probabilities.
To being with, on a lighter note, if the host country does not produce/provide sufficient/adequate job opportunities for the educated, there are always chances of getting a/an employment offer from any part of the globe, hence education plays a major role in an individual's career and it cannot be halted at primary school level. For instance, in countries like India, though there are lakhs of engineers graduating every year, most of them get job placement/s either within the country or outside the boundaries.
Secondly, the course of study should be modified in such way that education has a wider reach rather than concentrating only on academics. Children should be given variety of options like sports, culturals so that they have diversity in choosing their career. This avoids job crunches as people get scattered to various sectors for their employment. For instance, though Jamaica is a economically weak nation , it was able to produce a world famous athelete only because, their school syllabus embraced and supported sports to the full extent.
To conclude, I strongly believe that education is the primary need for an individual. However, nowadays increase in unemployment has become a threat for many students to pursue their education, this has to be stopped. Additionally, on the other hand education should also be improved in such a way that it creates more employment by diversifying its range.
- If you sell a product and the people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and considered as a kind of entertainment. Do you agree or disagree ? Give an example from your experience to support your opinion. 67
- Some people think that the modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. 78
- Some people believe that sleeping is ony the relaxing method which allows people to get enough relief.Others believe that physical activities such as playing games and exercises also provide enough relaxation.Discuss both the views and provide your opinio 84
- Some people think that schools do not do enough to teach young people about how to look after their health.To what extent do you agree or disagree. 92
- Some people say that holding sport competitions cause many troubles, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30476190476 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05707831893 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615873015873 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7805167879 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.25 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20915393889 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731989857179 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371856988565 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124528846453 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00377028178463 0.056905535591 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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