Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health and education and prevention

It is undeniably true that since time immemorial, humankind is facing unprecedented diseases and this has been skyrocketing nowadays due to various reasons. While governments are investing more funds to cure these diseases, few experts believe that it would be a good initiative to focus heavily on prevention and health education. In my opinion, the latter argument has more benefits and I strongly agree with it.

Treating patients with illnesses should be facilitated by authorities because neither middle nor the lower-income groups to bear the medical expenses of various chronical issues including cancer, diabetics. However, there are a plethora of reasons to research more on preventive methods and to educate citizens on health essentiality. The first point worth making is that by taking necessary actions such as discovering new vaccines, and by creating more health facilities governments can not only save millions of dwellers' lives but also create sophisticated health management systems.

The second most important point is that because of wellbeing classes citizens would develop new habits such as washing hands, eating at regular intervals, as well as the need of living in a hygiene environment. As a result, lifespan could be improved. In addition to these, health professionals should also explain the advantages of physical activities. These sessions would help to maintain fitness as well as the immunity power in humans. The final point is bureaucrats should conduct health awareness camps at regular intervals to explain the importance of tidiness in the neighborhood.

To conclude, in my opinion, although governments can treat ill patients, it should start investing more money to bring awareness in the masses and to invent new drugs. These steps would be essential to reduce the impact of new pandemics.

Votes
Average: 9.5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, while, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46315789474 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94956058827 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621052631579 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9950688309 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.769230769 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15672517304 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483251716407 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494727629785 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937097440267 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431358713462 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.05 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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